Ah, thanks for this. James is confident, but not arrogant, and still vulnerable. There really isn't enough novella-length Teddy/James.
One question: how long is Teddy's vacation? He says he'll be gone for four months, but several clues indicate that he leaves before James' sixth year begins and returns when said year is almost over. Since I'm already nitpicking: Lily describes James as "monody" (sic) in Chapter 2, and in Chapter 1's "There wouldn't even be a choice," I don't quite get why "choice" is italicized instead of "be".
Don't get me wrong - those are minor issues, and I really enjoy this story. The characterizations are sharp and believable, the dialogue is witty, and I particularly like the subtle ways in which the issues and discussions regarding a romantic relationship are foreshadowed. For instance: Teddy give sex advice but treats James as his equal when they discuss the article; Teddy refers to 16-year-old James as a child but also says he feels younger than he really is.
Come on, James, just pin Teddy to the nearest available wall ... ;)
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Date: 2009-02-28 01:42 pm (UTC)One question: how long is Teddy's vacation? He says he'll be gone for four months, but several clues indicate that he leaves before James' sixth year begins and returns when said year is almost over. Since I'm already nitpicking: Lily describes James as "monody" (sic) in Chapter 2, and in Chapter 1's "There wouldn't even be a choice," I don't quite get why "choice" is italicized instead of "be".
Don't get me wrong - those are minor issues, and I really enjoy this story. The characterizations are sharp and believable, the dialogue is witty, and I particularly like the subtle ways in which the issues and discussions regarding a romantic relationship are foreshadowed. For instance: Teddy give sex advice but treats James as his equal when they discuss the article; Teddy refers to 16-year-old James as a child but also says he feels younger than he really is.
Come on, James, just pin Teddy to the nearest available wall ... ;)