I know this is coming months afterward, but I just have to tell you how absolutely brilliant this fic is. The sex scenes are beautiful, tender and intense. The boys’ interactions are perfect. They just seem so real, so alive, and so very their age.
This chapter does have an awkward tilt--not because your writing is in any way deficient, but because the characters themselves are feeling their way through emotions that they don’t quite understand. The point of view you’ve chosen (second-person, is that what it’s called?) is often a hard one to get right, but you make it work wonderfully, giving us a look into Remus’ thoughts from his own perspective.
I also have to adore reluctant!dom!Remus, and insecure!sub!Sirius. The D/s element in this story is not only erotic, it’s deeply moving and entirely believable.
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Date: 2009-03-06 05:23 pm (UTC)This chapter does have an awkward tilt--not because your writing is in any way deficient, but because the characters themselves are feeling their way through emotions that they don’t quite understand. The point of view you’ve chosen (second-person, is that what it’s called?) is often a hard one to get right, but you make it work wonderfully, giving us a look into Remus’ thoughts from his own perspective.
I also have to adore reluctant!dom!Remus, and insecure!sub!Sirius. The D/s element in this story is not only erotic, it’s deeply moving and entirely believable.
Just overall awesome!